TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Celebrities and famous people are important and impressive people in each society especially, for young people. In my view, the youth and teenagers are more impressed by famous people than elders. I will elaborate my opinion on the following reasons.

My first and foremost reason is that from an educational standpoint young people and teenagers are searching for the ways of living and making their future. Hence, start to search for champions and heroes to follow their lives. Most of the youth would like to be a famous person in the future. Therefore, they study and search the manners of life of famous people and try to know more about their opinions and personal lives. For instance, when my cousin was a teenager, he would like to be a footballer, hence he always has studied the lifestyle of famous footballers.

Furthermore, youth usually watch the live games or exciting movies to release their energy. Young people are full of energy and want to release it in different ways. One of the healthy ways of releasing this energy is watching games or exciting movies, in this way, youth become interested in the athletes and celebrities. Hence, their opinions and lifestyle are important for youth. On the other hand, elders prefer to have a calm lifestyle for the rest of their lives. For instance, when my grandfather was a young man, he loved watching the football game, but, now he does not like it at all.

Admittedly, youth are attracting to the famous persons. The young people love some celebrities because they are famous, rich and some of them are good looking and attractive. Hence, they would like to know more about their personal lives and opinions. For example, one of my friends loved a celebrity of our country and she extracted all the details of his personal life and opinions. Hence, I think the opinions of celebrities are more impressive for young people than elders.

By the mentioned grounds, I believe that the opinions of famous people are more important for youth and teenagers than old persons. Because young people are searching for the best lifestyle, are full of energy, love the famous people and would like to be a famous person in the future.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ke to be a famous person in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87967914439 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53657085702 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433155080214 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2167958121 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9047619048 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157327264371 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633504597724 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525571059582 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120552201762 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563344042879 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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