Famous entertainers and athletes are an important part of every society because people like them and follow them. Although some people think that older people advert celebrities more, many may take the opposite viewpoint. Nevertheless, many factors should be taken into consideration to be able to prove which belief is closer to reality. As far as I’m concerned, I firmly contend that famous people are more important for younger people. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my perspective for three reasons.
The first noteworthy point to be mentioned in this context is that younger people like celebrities more than older people. Certainly, some people would presume that older people attend to celebrities more. However, we should consider that in many cases older people have more important matters in mind and they are so busy. A recent study indicates that as the age of people increases, they think about more important issues in life and following celebrities become useless for them. So, elderly people prefer to think about key issues of the life.
Equally important is that youth have less experience in life. They will obey every idea sooner than elderly people because they think everybody is right and have good intentions. It’s completely accepted by all the people that older people are deceived less than young people. To illustrate this idea let’s consider a personal example. My cousin study psychology and he did his thesis about the relation between the age of people and the rate of crime. He understood that young people make mistake more. As a consequence, young people have less experience and follow others easier so they follow celebrities more.
Furthermore, it’s an indisputable fact that young people like to be famous and accepted by others. It’s obvious that in this situation celebrities are the people that young people like to be similar to them. As a consequence, they will try to follow them. For instance, one of my friends in high school liked to be famous. She followed all of the famous actresses and wished to be one of them in the future. She tried to treat like them and also use the same style of life and clothes. She thought that with doing these works, she will close to her goal. However, after a time she understood that isn’t talented for being an actress. After that, she didn’t care about celebrities life and she started to live in her own way. So we can infer that many youths imitate celebrities because they like to have the same job but older people find their appropriate job so, celebrities aren’t attractive anymore.
In brief, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that youth imitate celebrities more than older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, for instance, in brief, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07947019868 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63048343548 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461368653422 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4630924235 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1785714286 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1785714286 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229824472625 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757250928608 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579618554667 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163198456361 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432145719917 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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