Nowadays, there are many institutions who is working in the field of motivation and awareness to focus for the younger children. The crucial age and changing the living style of family, younger children are highly impacted of lacking the enough time to spend with parents, sharing their feelings etc. Those institutions sometimes invite the celebrities to conduct their program and they give a good response from the younger children. I strongly believe that celebrities has that attraction to capture the focus of youth. I feel this way because of two reason which I will explore in the following essays.
First of all, the global scenario has changed than prior because of advance technology and different social media people are connecting globally and reach through out the world. Celebrities who is working as a singer, dancer, actor has great influence to the growing children. They are highly attracted because of their working style besides that their living standard, their make up style and get up. Every child has their role model and they follow each and every activities of them. I have seen one such evidence of my sister who is die heart fan of Beyoance a american singer. She had always follow her style of singing and dancing not even that she try to do make up like her with the hope of that somebody may notice her and give comment that you are looking like a Beyoance. But my sister always refuse to eat green vegetables and lot of water. My parents was in tension about her behavior.They try to convince her that how good for health to drink water and eat vegetables but they did not success ed. Later on, one day in the interview of Beyonce, she told that the reason behind he beauty and charm is only because of drinking lot of water and eating vegetables. My sister automatically impressed her opinion and from that day she start eating vegetables and drinking water. As a result, she become more healthy and beautiful and still following her tricks.
Second, older people has already face so many obstacles in their life. They faced many ups and downs when they are in different phase of life like young age, college life, professional life and from personal relations. They do not need to give any importance to listen the view of celebrities to learn about the life and struggles. The older people can be the role model to the younger people but the problem is younger people do not listen to them only because they are not in fame and no one know and admire. Talking about the young children who strictly follow and influence from the celebrities sometime it may lead to the danger situation also. For instance, In my country high school children are highly influence by the work of actor name Rajesh SIngha. He has craze in the youngster. In his every movie, he has shown as a chain smoker and alcoholic. The role in movie highly impacted the life of Youngster because they try to copy of him and start smoking and drinking alcohol in the believe of looking cool and extra. One day school organization invite to interact program to that actor with the student and they got to know that he even did not smoke and drink and that do not make people cool they quit smoke and drinks.
In the conclusion, celebrities are highly influential to the younger children because of their publicity and follower. Younger people always try to copy them. Even school teacher and parents cannot make them convince about the dos and do not but the opinion of celebrities can make it possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, still, for instance, i feel, talking about, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 39.0 13.8261648746 282% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2898.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 613.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72756933116 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42535960664 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442088091354 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 908.1 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1635948222 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9310344828 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1379310345 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24137931034 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152010403043 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404830308457 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352851888312 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942389112961 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240441196059 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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