TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

Both the author and the professor talks about the existence of bees around 200 million years ago. The author states that it is not found any solid evidence to support whether the bees has early evolved as early as 200 million years or not and provide the three reason to disagree a theory. However, the professor says that it is possible to exist bees though not found the special evidence and refutes each of the reason provide by author in the passage.

First, the passage posits that there is no any fossils to support the presence of bees during that period. But, the professor rebuts by saying that it is true that there is no fossil found during the period of 200 million years that does not mean no bees were exist in that time. He mention that, it may be because of trees. Trees were not present and without tree it is not possible to provide the evidence of bees. If trees were present at those time, certain evidence were stick in their sticky liquid of trees. Trees were only present after so long time later.

Second, the author claims that bees only feed the flowering plants and there were no flowering plant at that time period so, we cannot say that bees were present during 200 million years ago. In contrast, the professor explains that before the flowering plant, bees use non flowering plant to feed like ferns, pine etc. After the presence of flowering plant bees start to adapt to use flowering plant for feeding purpose.
Third, the reading mention that there is no any solid proof about the chamber found in that era was made by bees because those types of fossilized structures were made by other insects such as wood boring beetles. However, the professor counters this point by saying that there is a chemical evidence which clearly shows that bees made their chamber in 200 million years ago. The chamber made by bees is water distinct like the same kind of water proof chamber made by modern bees today.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...First, the passage posits that there is no any fossils to support the presence of ...
^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...n years that does not mean no bees were exist in that time. He mention that, it may ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that does not mean no bees were exist in that time. He mention that, it may be be...
^^
Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...an no bees were exist in that time. He mention that, it may be because of trees. Trees...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...present at those time, certain evidence were stick in their sticky liquid of trees. ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 42, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...hird, the reading mention that there is no any solid proof about the chamber found...
^^
Line 6, column 441, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...is water distinct like the same kind of water proof chamber made by modern bees today.
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, in contrast, kind of, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6231884058 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.02962722771 2.5805825403 79% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431884057971 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.10850449 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0623536581797 0.272083759551 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279772667737 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0175483592728 0.0662205650399 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0401724789227 0.162205337803 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146194592059 0.0443174109184 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 53.8541721854 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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