TPO 47 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life

With the advent of modern technology, especially the internet, and the ever-increasing pace of its improvements, people can become aware of events happening around the globe in the most convenient way. As so, people are faced with a plethora of information every day. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars on whether people should read about the news that doesn't have anything to do with them. I vehemently cling to the notion that individual should enhance their information as they can. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.

The first reason coming to mind, elucidating my stand, is concerned with the issue that even though some news might seem that they have nothing to do with our lives, in the long run, they might affect us. Therefore, we should read about them and prepare ourselves for upcoming effects. By doing so, we can prepare ourselves for possible deleterious repercussions of that event. An example can drive this notion home. Not long ago, an oil transportation ship drowned in the Pacific Ocean. An ordinary person might think that this won't affect his life whatsoever. Surprisingly, due to this accident, the price of gas increased tremendously in Asia. This example clearly illustrates the importance of reading various news, even if it's not directly related to our country.

Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that by reading other news, we can develop our cognitive skills and critical thinking. By knowing and learning from events that have occurred around the world, we can learn from their consequences and implant that knowledge into our society. For instance, by reading about a rebel happening in another nation, we can perceive what gave rise to that action, and try to prevent it in our nation in advance. Contemporary human beings need to learn from other people's mistakes. By not reading news occurring in other parts of the world, we're restricting ourselves to just our own experience, and one can not experience everything. If we don't learn from the past, we're condemned to repeat it, and it's crystal clear that this is not the right path to follow.

To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that individuals should become aware of different news around the world, on the ground that it might indirectly affect our life, as well as we can learn valuable lessons from them and strengthen our society.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04245283019 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76173102263 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540094339623 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1018720475 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.9 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149593660891 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436877477556 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353236308157 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947370792172 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317926839625 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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