TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task

The article introduces the topic of harm caused by building glasses on birds. More specifically, the writer discusses three solutions to overcome this problem. The lecturer strongly disagrees with the author's stance. He believes that these methods can not effectively stop birds from crashing into glasses.

In the reading, the author begins by stating that one method is to use one-way glasses so that people in the building can see outside, but birds will see the glass as a solid barrier. The lecturer, however, completely disagrees with this viewpoint. He contends that one-way glasses reflect like mirrors and birds don't understand mirrors. Additionally, he goes on to say that these glasses reflect the sky and trees, therefore, birds are going to think that they can fly through it.

Furthermore, the author proposes that the second solution is to paint thin stripes over the glasses. By doing this, people can enjoy the scene, as well as birds won't damage themselves. Again, the lecturer believes there are flaws in the writer's argument. The speaker asserts that these stripes include openings in them. As a result, birds are going to perceive them as holes and try to pass through them. Moreover, he mentions that if we want to prevent this we have to make the small between stripes very small, which can make the room dark. Consequently, this idea won't work either.

Finally, the writer brings his argument to a close by suggesting that the third way is to create a magnetic field to guide birds away from the building. In contrast, the professor in the speaking passage is doubtful that this is accurate. He notes that birds use their magnetic sense as a navigator when they want to travel long distances. In addition, he claims that birds use their eyes and the environment's light for short distances. Consequently, this technique won't have much effect on this matter.

To sum up, both the author and professor hold conflicting views about the effectiveness of the methods presented in the reading.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...he lecturer strongly disagrees with the authors stance. He believes that these methods ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... glasses reflect like mirrors and birds dont understand mirrors. Additionally, he go...
^^^^
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ecturer believes there are flaws in the writers argument. The speaker asserts that thes...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, well, in addition, in contrast, as a result, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 336.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02083333333 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58473018796 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559523809524 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5330365338 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3333333333 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61904761905 7.06452816374 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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