TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

With no doubt, it is vivid that more you know better. So I utterly agree with the statement for several reasons. In what follows I will delve into some conspicuous reasons to substitute my point of view:
To begin with, Although comunication in animals population is very initial and primary, their lives are in close relationship with each other. If one of the species gets endanger for reproducing and their generations get to a precarious state other animals livings assuredly gets enormously affected. This is the law of nature that everything must be in an unalterable and immutable equivalence. The humans are no exception in this law so it is obvious that changes will somehow have an influence and impact in our lives, maybe we aren't just fully aware of that. Thus knowing about the events and occurrences and their connection to our lives will help us to make decisions with more precaution and intelligence. For instance, our economic and business schemes for future are intangible proportion with the rest of the world.
Secondly every day we hear about things that don't change a single thing in our lives so we can't obviously ignore the news or talking to others just because they aren't any distinct. Even though that news might be about the people on the other edge of this globe but we are all humans and it is our duty as parts of a big community to encourage standing outrageously upon each other against the oppressive and cruelness, that have become prevalent in the world. Say the people in Syria, they are getting butchered no matter the sex or age. Knowing this won't change our quality of life and we can do nothing but a little support for them that one day it'll be over this will strengthen them and might mitigate their anomalous pain.
The other subtle point that can be mentioned is that even though we live in a third world country the announcements in science or technology is something we better know for our own sake since it might be an incentive to make improvements or may just light up a single sparkle in mind that later we will be grateful about. Even if a news makes us think about it in silence for few moments worth hearing because thinking is kind of an exercise for the brain in this era that, the technology's tendency is to comfort people and sometimes there are too much of it.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I utterly object to the statement that hearing and knowing what events are happening around the world is of no use to us. To put on briefly contemplating all factors and reasons, the truth contrariety is, it has lots of benefits to have that much knowledge about the people, technology, and achievements in so many ways.

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Average: 7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 532, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...uence and impact in our lives, maybe we arent just fully aware of that. Thus knowing ...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...dly every day we hear about things that dont change a single thing in our lives so w...
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Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hange a single thing in our lives so we cant obviously ignore the news or talking to...
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Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
... or talking to others just because they arent any distinct. Even though that news mig...
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Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...ater we will be grateful about. Even if a news makes us think about it in silence for ...
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Line 4, column 423, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'an' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...ments worth hearing because thinking is kind of an exercise for the brain in this era that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, for instance, kind of, no doubt, you know, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68921775899 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63070254866 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530655391121 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5518904858 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.625 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5625 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171469065692 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629533889752 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478921426395 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108176859649 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342602128923 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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