TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Without a shadow of a doubt, in this hectic and extremely complex world we live in, it is essential for people especially the youth to have some plans in order to have promising-future. Some people believe, that it is vital for young people to have some ability to organize their lives. Others, hold the view, that it is not necessary for youth to have the ability to plan their future. I am of the opinion, that it is essential for young people to have the ability to organize. I will attempt to address the most discernible reasons in the ensuing lines.

One imperative idea coming to mind at first is about young people's prosperity in future. It is crystal clear that, having some plan, the youth know that what s/he wants from life and future. Therefore, s/he could acquire prosperity in his or her future life. Besides, they assured that they are utilize their maximum efficiency. Consequently, they should have the ability to organize, owing to the fact that, if they were unable to plan and organize, they would not be prosperous in their future. To illustrate my point, let me elaborate upon it by presenting an explanation. Consider a thirty-year-old man embarking on establishing a company. He should work hard toward his goal. having some plan in this circumstance positively affect his success. Thereby, he would organize his works to accomplish the best he can do. Furthermore, if he had not some plans for his project, he would not have known what to do in the next step. Thus, the more ability to plan one has, the more prosperity that person could acquire.

Increasing the young people's self-reliance is the second interesting point which deserves some words here. It goes without saying that, having the ability to plan contributes to increasing one's self-esteem, owing to s/he knows what s/he wants from his or her life. Furthermore, having plan, emancipates them from having life full of stress. According to Dr. Hasan Zohoor, a prominent and highly respected psychologist at the University of Tehran, if someone had the ability to organize his or her life, it would have led to the gratification of that person's ego due to their peace of mind. For instance, I had a friend in university, he had the ability to plan every single day-works and he had a powerful self-esteem. I adamantly believe, that no one could underestimate the profound effect of having the ability to plan regarding one's self-reliance being increased.

In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I have come to believe, that it is essential for the juvenile to have the ability to organize their lives. Not only does it leads to the persons' prosperity in their future lives, but it contributes to their self-confidence being increased.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90343347639 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88979633173 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459227467811 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6914296204 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.64 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239338990648 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807219400661 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740320378343 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168257470215 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662993497337 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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