TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Speaking of this issue, I highly agree that it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize in modern life. Even though some people have different perspectives, I still think it is very important for young people to learn how to manage themselves better. Here are reasons as below.

To begin with, in 21 centuries, young adults need to take lots of thing into consideration, and it is a fundamental skill to plan and organize themselves. To be more specific, in my country, it is gradually hard for young adults to find a well-paid job. Therefore, hundreds of fresh-graduated students have difficulty in seeking a job related their major, and they start thinking the possibility working abroad. In this circumstance, young adults have to make a plan if they work in the other country such the tickets, the salary, and the cost. Apparently, it is important that young adults are capable of making a plan.

Second, it is a key to be the success that young people have an ability to organize themselves. That is to say, the more self-organized, the easier to success. Take my friend Lia as an example, before she graduated from university, she had already decided to work in Google as an engineer. Besides, in order to be an engineer, she spent lots of time to improve her computer skills and language. Eventually, after three months, she received interview chance and successfully joined the company. Once again, organizing is a critical component of success.

To sum up, because modern life is complicated, it is definitely that young people need to think comprehensively. Moreover, young people can become successful.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of things'.
Suggestion: lots of things
...21 centuries, young adults need to take lots of thing into consideration, and it is a fundame...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, well, speaking of, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96750902527 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97001133003 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559566787004 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.44471477 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3125 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237144998701 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779636551347 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0923145105302 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163215533084 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980362582523 0.0645574589148 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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