TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

In the modern age, the advanced technology offers great convenience to the public and it is no wonder that some teenagers hold the view that under the help of modern technology, young man do not need to practise the planning ability as they used to do. In the Contrast, from my perspective, I hold the counterargument that the ability to plan and organize is essential to an individual in the modern society.

To begin with, it is a common situation that opportunities are prepared for those people who have the detailed plan. Since without preparation, one can hardly get the chance in their career due to many factors such as fierce competition. To illustrate that idea, I would like to use the example of my cousin. My cousin like to make a detailed plan for every thing in his life from his career plan to one night spent with his families. It could be a little exhausting to hang out with him since it could be frustrating to follow a plan which is precise to 1 minute. However, this habit of my cousin helped him to get the chance to study aboard in Germany with full scholarship offered by his university. It is obvious that there could be plenty of people who want this change, but my cousin made a drastic investigation, and even read all the papers of the professor came from that Germany university. They had a pleasant talk which left the professor a good impression and finally my cousin got that chance. In this case, the planning ability is critical to a individual in the modern society.

Another reason to endorse my position is that the one capable of giving a detained and good at organizing would be popular in his social circle. This reason lies in the fact that it is human nature to left messy work to others like planning and eventually everyone would like to pay their trust to you. One of my former classmates, for instance, was very popular among the classmates and everyone like to make friends with him since he could always make a good party plan. Consequently, the claim that the organizing ability is important in the modern life is more reasonable.

To wrap things up, at the first glance, it could be hard to distinguish that, especially when it is taken into consideration under the complicated situations in the real world. However, after deliberation, I insists that the ability to make plans is important.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1059, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'insist'
Suggestion: insist
...l world. However, after deliberation, I insists that the ability to make plans is impor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, so, for instance, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66987951807 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70719862075 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506024096386 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2622727492 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4117647059 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190414855594 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644962983483 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555077256143 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112027010617 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499048665775 0.0645574589148 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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