TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

People likes to live in society and stay in contact with their siblings. In this context, friendship is a very important thing in the life of a human. I think that being able to maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important than making new friends. And, in the next few lines, I shall give two reasons to explain why I feel that way.

First at all, friendship requires time, and hardship because it's a feeling. This feeling needs to be built and nurtured on the basis of confidence between two people. This is the reason why, for instance, no one will immediately trust a newly met person in a street, by revealing to this one, his credit card number and password, or its deepest concerns. It's not only shameful and dangerous, but also a utter stupidity.

The second reason is that in our society, being able to have long life friends is a proof of maturity and wisdom in handling human relationships. Someone who have this king of ability can be considered as reliable and worthy to be given some social, and political responsibilities. For example, a candidate for a presidential or a communal election need the assistance of is friends and relatives who can bear witness of its reliability, and social skills, if he or her want to stand a chance.

In conclusion, I believe that life is a long and difficult road. Having long life friends help us to not feel lonely but also shoulder the issues and challenges we are facing.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... being able to maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long period of time is mo...
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Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time is more important than making new frien...
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Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...hip requires time, and hardship because its a feeling. This feeling needs to be bui...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... deepest concerns. Its not only shameful and dangerous, but also a utter stupidit...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... only shameful and dangerous, but also a utter stupidity. The second reason ...
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Suggestion:
... a utter stupidity. The second reason is that in our society, being able to ha...
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Suggestion:
...long life friends is a proof of maturity and wisdom in handling human relationshi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...political responsibilities. For example, a candidate for a presidential or a com...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...itical responsibilities. For example, a candidate for a presidential or a commun...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e assistance of is friends and relatives who can bear witness of its reliability,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1221.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.625 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71522750418 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609848484848 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1579242809 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9230769231 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210227587602 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699786373253 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112273834214 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119256774427 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108917205631 0.0645574589148 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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