TPO-5 : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
At different times, people in society shows a different attitude to perform and behave. Sometimes they are more loyal to their duty and things they should do. On the other hand, sometimes they prefer to do things that satisfy them individually. To my mind, this statement is correct due to a couple of reasons that I will give them in the following paragraph.
I should illustrate that this sentence occurs in two different ways, negative and positive. First of all, in a good way, I think that nowadays, the priority of people has changed. Now everyone realized that he or she and his/her happiness is the most important thing in a healthy life. A lot of psychologists advise people to care about themselves more, and people accepted that. As a result, people try to spend time and even more money on personal pleasure. They may work fewer to have more time for fun and rest, and that is great. It can decrease their tensions about life, future, kids, etc.
Moreover, I think in some way, people became more greedy and selfish and, moral issues are disappearing. They did not believe anymore that sometimes, they should sacrifice for others, or even themselves! Having no respect for our health to enjoy unhealthy things, for example, is a sign of the pointed question. When I ask my friends to don't smoke for their health, I heard this statement a lot that we live just one time, let us enjoy it! And about others, for instance, my cousin used to look after his old mother, but now, he left her in the elder's house to have more freedom to live the life he wants.
To sum up, as I said, these days people spend more time on personal enjoyment. In my mind, It has two reasons that lead people to two different attitudes. I hope that everyone just keeps the balance, get the right point, and behave properly. So we will have a better society, that everyone cares about themselves and others enough.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62536873156 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43499916696 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572271386431 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7974102749 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1111111111 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211364630367 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676018174479 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903900574165 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131849502055 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09893997694 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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