TPO 51 Writing IndependentDo you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

On the whole, it is of little doubt, if any, that role of media such as television is an issue of great importance and consideration. Watching movies can affect both our quality of life and the level of performance in daily tasks. Consequently, the relation between television and the young generation has priority. In this regard, some people wonder movies and television have negative effects on youth more than positive impacts. I definitely disagree with the statement and believe the positive effects of TV are more obvious. In the ensuing lines, I will provide two reasons for the collaboration with this thesis.
The first idea worthy of consideration is that watching movies and television is fun. In the modern era, young people can get away from hustle and bustle of a hectic life by enjoying time watching TV. At the end of the day, relaxing in front of a TV and getting involved with characters of movies or shows is really a wonderful way to forget the problems and enjoy the time. Taking Friends series as an example, imagine a young man who watches this show every night. He will become interested in the plotline and what happens to the characters including Joey. So he wishes for walking in Joey's shoes and forgets about difficulties like being single and rejected by ladies daily as well as having no job. This activity provides enjoyment for him and he can have so much pleasure. This clearly indicates that watching television’s positive effects is really influential.
The second noticeable reason is that watching movies and television can be used as a means of learning new things. Some movie companies, also assign a significant budget for producing documentary especially for young people as they are a massive group of audiences. In this way, watching new information, comprise of sound and images, can be more effective even more than reading texts. On the other hand, blocking TV and movies can eliminate an efficient way of learning in one's life. For instance, as far as I remember since I was in high school, my favorite channel was National Geography. When I watched those documentaries about stars, wild animals, the ocean and other interesting subjects, I could go through it a whole day long. Sometimes I even took notes from the documentary to use them as worthy information for my projects and assignments. After all these years, not only I do not stop watching this channel but also suggest my family members and friends watch it. This shows that television has a lot of benefits.
By and large, based on the aforementioned arguments, the positive effects of television on young people are more than its negative effects due to fun time watching them and how learning they can be. I think people should spend more time watching it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
... In this way, watching new information, comprise of sound and images, can be more effective...
Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...iminate an efficient way of learning in ones life. For instance, as far as I remembe...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, so, well, after all, for instance, i think, such as, as well as, by and large, on the whole, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89384288747 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75344129382 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545647558386 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6862227031 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.84 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.48 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245287618284 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751563182529 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806048737575 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18391926058 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739668590489 0.0645574589148 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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