TPO 53 independent agree or not: it is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Development of cities requires numerous actions which cost governments a preponderance amount of money. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether it is better that governments spend money for the Internet improvement or developing public transportation means. From my point of view, I am inclined to the former idealization in spite of the fact that the latter has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that there are myriad new jobs which are in need of the Internet more than public transportation. Thus, budgeting for that reason is more profitable for the governments. As an illustration, freelancers, translators, and computer programmers are mostly working with their laptops in their homes, and they are not usually required to go to offices. A satisfactory service of the Internet (in the means of uploading speed for example) is more critical for these workers in comparison with having suitable transportation. I my self, for instance, have been doing my tasks from home for three years. I have been a translator (for AryanaGhalam publisher) as well as a stock market trader (in Tehran Stock Market in Iran); the Internet is my only convey of working and collaborating with my colleagues most of whom I have never visited physically. Provided that governments help improving the Internet accessibility and services, these kinds of jobs will increase which will benefit the governments themselves, mainly because they will decrease the demand of public transportation which is more expensive through the lens of governments' major expenses.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that the strategy of improving the Internet allows individuals to do most of their chores inside in stead of wasting their precious time and money going outside. Most of the tasks related to banking and shoping can be done by using personal computers nowadays, thanks to the Internet. Norway, for instance, has founded its diverse Internet-service-providing companies in order to ease the deamnding tasks of banking, such as paying diverse bills, for its citizens. Their researchers in Norwegian Business School conducted a survey in Oslove and realized that this strategy was successful, mainly becuase it decreased the trips of people inside the city which has saved its government's spending on public transportation maintenance. They conclude that this action will have increased the satisfactory level of their citizend for 10% by the end of 2050.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I believe that focuing on the improvement of the Internet is more profitable for both government sand people although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinions, This inclination not only serves better for distant jobs like freelansing, programming, and translating which need the Intenrnet more than public transportation but also it can decrease the requirement of public transportation and its related expenses insomuch as individuals can do their banking chores from their homes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 926, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to improve' or 'improve'.
Suggestion: to improve; improve
...sically. Provided that governments help improving the Internet accessibility and services...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: IN_STEAD_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
...duals to do most of their chores inside in stead of wasting their precious time and money g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, regarding, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2810.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42471042471 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24021507833 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515444015444 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 860.4 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8275411771 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.894736842 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2631578947 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302232487425 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091400417938 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799200478866 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19894216666 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278475161202 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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