TPO 36 independent
agree or not. for the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities.
Raising young generation properly, especially educationally, has been one of the most substantial responsibilities of all governments all around the world from which they cannot run away easily. In this context, there are mutually exclusive notions regarding whether focusing on children is more profitable for the future of a country or investing on university students. From my point of view, I am inclined to the latter idea in spite of the fact that the former has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that teenagers can better think and plan for their future because their brains are well-developed and mature in comparison with youngsters. Thus, universities are better places for investment although it may be more expensive. To put it into a more vivid picture, let us compare Brazil with Norway, one successful and one unsuccessful experience. In Brazil, its president decided to focus on kindergartens to raise a great generation. On the other hand, before Norway's president chose to support the chosen institutes financially, Norwegian researchers had conducted a survey in their country and had realized that universities will have been the main institues determining their nation's success by the end of 2050; therefore, they decided to invest on universities. Now, during 2020, Brazil is suffering from lack of well-trained engineers and technicians and struggling to reduce crimes, but Norway have developed the best renowned engineers who are increasing the Norway's both international reputation and annual public income.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that as knowledge institutes are better related to the industry, they can select vital majors and subjects to be tought which are required by diverse industries, such as architectural, engineering, and construction (AEC) industry. Speaking industrially, governments will obtain short and mid-term objectives easily by spending money in the universities. As an illustration, Iran is always in need of petrolium engineers, mainly because its main income is from extracting petrol and gas. Therefore, by investing on petrolium engineering faculties, mainly in Ahvaz and Tehran provinces, its governments trains about 100 engineers every year who will work for the country in numerous gas and oil sites in the soth of the country. Providing that the government have decided to focus on kids, it could not have developed its petrol industry which is really vital as Iran is competing with Qatar for mutual sites in Persian Gulf.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations and facts into account, I am prone to this idea that investing on universities is more benefical for countries comparing with focusing more on kids. To recapitulate my opinions, not only university students have mature brains and can better think of their destiny, but also universities are interrelated with myriad industries and can provide trained experts working in differents majors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in short, such as, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2712.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46774193548 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14243057635 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560483870968 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 846.9 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.956533122 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.529411765 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1764705882 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19062563421 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594628596176 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537012592957 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110210768595 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00659153322589 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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