Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an increasing debate on how a government should spend money on the education. Some people claim that the money should be spent on young children while others are against this idea and suggest that a government should spend money on universities. In my opinion, I support the later argument and I will develop the explanations in the following paragraphs.
First of all, university students can make direct contribution to a country in few years. After students graduate from university, they usually find jobs and make real efforts to the society. These young people working in a variety of industries to develop a country and contribute to the gross domestic products for a country. Even though some students do not go to industries and choose further studies to become doctors, their research results are making the country more developed and more advanced. Moreover, some of them become professors to educate our next generations. It is obviously that these young people can promptly develop a country. For example, my brother who was a senior student in university. He received scholarships from a university and then decided to pursue further studies in chemical. His research was a breakthrough in a chemical field and thus benefited many chemistry companies. For this reason, I firmly believe that it is more important for a government to spend money on universities.
In addition, the expenses in university are usually costly. To hire good professor and researchers takes tons of money. In order to provide better education qualities, universities have to pay high compensations to attract outstanding scholars from overseas. Drawing from my experience, my university hired a famous professor in the finance field last semester. I was really impressed by her deep knowledges and detailed lectures. I really hope that my university can hire more lecturers like this professor but it is not possible for my university as it costs much. If a government can support universities, students from universities can have a high quality of education and students can contribute to a country after their graduation. As a result, I think a government should spend money on universities.
In lights of the reasons above, I strongly reckon spending money on universities is more important than spending money on young children.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, really, so, then, thus, while, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23138297872 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04838634224 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.142937853 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326653776125 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979452450927 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988082636982 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24035460267 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803898702316 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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