Funding is vitally important in the development of any industry. Governments should spend their money wisely. While both arts and athletics need financial support, in the case of Taiwan, I believe that it is more important to fund athletics.
To begin with, sports have a significant impact on Taiwan's society. There are more people p following sports events rather than art events. This can be revealed from discussions on social media. For example, when Olympics games are happening, there is news every day, even though not many people partake in sports in daily lives, the popularity of sports is unquestionable. In contrast, art events are relatively esoteric. Although there are also big art events held in Taiwan, they have never gained so much attention. If the government spend more money in support of athletics, a highly motivated society can be expected.
Second, currently, sports in Taiwan are not well-sponsored by the government. The fund used on our athletics are not only insufficient for training but also unable to support their living expenses. This makes athletics often stay in the fear of losing. In fact, with lack of support, there is a growing trend that top athletics leave the country and even change their nationality to look for sponsors, leading to huge loss in the strength of national teams. Considering the situation of the sports industry here in Taiwan, all it needs is money from the government.
As illustrated above, sports are closer related to society than arts, and sports industry in Taiwan are seriously underfunded. I, therefore, disagree with the idea that the government spends money on arts than athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...teams. Considering the situation of the sports industry here in Taiwan, all it needs i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in contrast, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77619955166 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585185185185 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7956879583 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0588235294 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8823529412 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251006704363 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805220779109 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752523240879 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156794194778 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160651456837 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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