TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Needless to say that by the advent of the internet dramatic atleration has happened in the world. Actually, the infrastructure of the internet is prevailing constantly in most contries. Invariably, most nations invest huge amount of funds to broaden the access of the internet. Owing to the imprtance of the growth of this facility most assert that the required budget should be provided by govenment by eleminating other plans like public transportation. On the contrary, I am firmly of the belief that allocating adequate fund for public transportation is more critical than expanding the internet. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my standpoint.

The first fact that holds me this belief is the should government invest on public transportation, will they solve a critical enviromental issue. Actually, by growing population and civilization, the required falicities for people are not fairly enough and suitable. Likewise, by renowing the present buses and increasing number of them, the air pollution will be decreased dramatically. The stronger is the public transportation, the less is air polluted. In this case Tehran is the most crowded city of iran. I was reading an article about the significance of investment of government on buses and subway to improve the public transportation. It mentiond that actually the numer of buses should enhance twice for three years. It mentiond otherwise, living in this city would be more difficult. Considering this situation, spending money on less important subjects like internet appears unwisely.

Another reason deserves some words here is that utilizing independent entities to invest in the internet would be more profitable for the society. Generally, there are some corporations that are desired to contract with government and expand the internet structure individually. Actually, exploting advertisements and web-businesses, this companies can revenue form the internet. Therefore, exercising a suitable contract can let the government to pay money for cucial affairs. Simultaniously, the internet infrastructure will be developed. For instance, a foriegn company became volunteer to provide high-spead world wide network for iran several years ago. Hence, after meetinga s soms procedures, they could reach an appropriate aggrement. As a result, there is acceptable internet facilities in my country without spending huge amount of money by government.

In conclusion, In my opinion allocating money for the internet instead of public transportation is not a wisely decision. Actually, public transportation is more vital than the Inernet. Besides, individual entities can found on the internet.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, hence, if, likewise, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67326732673 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25040246202 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542079207921 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9939898202 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1538461538 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0767500338659 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.022947399475 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0240808401631 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0508190905681 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00512877152333 0.0645574589148 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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