TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Influencing by others is one of the most critical concerns of modern society. Needless to say that students are under the impacts of others in every age. Some people may characterize teachers responsible for students' behavior more than teachers, whereas others would take the reverse view. However, I firmly of the belief that students infinitely react like their friends and more influenced by them as a comparison to teachers. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my stand-point.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that students spend more time with friends. It can be illustrated that everywhere the more students are, they will be more favorable to participate. The best way to effect perfectly on students is by getting help from their closest friends. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I was studying master in the university, so I spend the most of my time with my friends in the company. I can remember my induction motor teacher was really unfavorable to me; hence, I didn't participate in his lessons. After a while, I realized that he is a perfect guy since he tried to communicate more with me and become one of my friends as a teacher. He has significant impacts on my entire of my life, not only as a teacher but also as a perfect friend. Thus, it can be seen that this opportunity couldn't occur to me if my teacher wouldn't become one of my best friends.
Another reason is that similar experience, according to the same age between friends is extremely widespread. I read several articles on the Iranian society journal about people influence others. They analyze the various impacts of human nature; hence, they assume that every person could effect, positive or negative on others, but the more connection between them is, the more impacts will be. On of the articles estimates that approximately 30 percent of people effected by same-age friends; so, teachers are kind of the grow up friends. I can remember when I was studying at Sharif university about nine years ago, I had many friends with a variety of age. I gained the best experience of my life from my same-age friends like love, social, family tie experience. In fact, I was under the impact of my best friends entire of my life. Thus, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience that same-age friends have an extreme role in student life.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the idea, students are more effected by their friends, not only because of the more time they spend with them but also since they common experiences which could help them to better grow up. Every person should have perfect friends with high similarity entire his life in order to obtain positive impacts from him.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84133611691 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65792095934 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488517745303 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4778381003 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.826086957 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8260869565 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153836750155 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534848889 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400211949865 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11185969653 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342909696299 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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