TPO52 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO52 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

societies rules play an essential roles in our modern creteria. Needless to say that young people must obey society as adult people. Some young people may think that it is really too strict to obey all of the society rules whereas others would take the reverse. Even though, some of the rules are hard to obey for young people since the find more crucial to do anything they want. Nevertheless, I firmly of the belief that our modern rules are not complex and strict to obey for anyone. The following reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.

The first fact that holds me this concept is that people freedoms are increase today considerably. In fact, it can be illustrated that everywhere you look around there are many new area which adult people as young are interesting to. The best way to increase people health is impose some rules which pervent them to harm theme selves or other health. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I realized that we must increase our products; so, I hire new employers in order to expand our company. After a while, I saw most of the new young workers made more and more noises or smoke while working since they did not know serious consequence of them on our production. I pass several lawsin order to pervent negative consequence like injury only because of all the worker lives. Thus, it can be seen this rules would not be too strict to obey for young people if the know more about health and team-working creteria.

Another reason is that societies rules have perfect balanced in modern life. I read several articles about history of persia at iranian journal three months ago. They analyze the various impacts of laws on human welfare; hence, assume that some of the past rules were perfectly stricts, which it ca not imagin in modern life. On of the articles estimates that about 40 percent of the rules are chenge in today iranian life and increase their interaction with each other and solve some complex past issues for young people freedom. I can remeber my personal experience when I was studying at Sharif university ten years ago. we could absent in some lesson more than four time if we had permision from doctors. this easy rule had perfect impact on today students life as it did not accur about 50 years ago since our professor said hard issue shich he had only becuase of absens of this law when he studying. Therefore, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience that balanced of law are reduce striction of moderns rules and make it more comfortable to obey.

In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, our society rules are easy to obey for young people. Not only becuase of they give more freedom to people for better choice, but also their balances are now increase perfectly which make them more comfortable to obey.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72619047619 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38136157198 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8280900324 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.565217391 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9130434783 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210253216792 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708345209106 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056439490992 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146049142376 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797257064926 0.0645574589148 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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