TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, there is a statement that state funding should incline to the arts rather than the athletics such as Olympic team and it is intensely disrupted. Someone support this statement because the charm of art raises one's sentiment and exhibits the intelligence and wisdom of a nation. Other people doubt it in terms of athletics also has many advantages such as improve national physique. From my point of view, the government shouldn't pay attention to only one side.

First of all, I want to talk about why should the government spend money on athletics. On the one hand, with the increasing input from national finance, more and more people will come into contact with this domain. Pretty obviously, some people who have never touch upon the athletics may find their talent on it and keep practicing. At last, they may be a high level athlete. On the other hand, because of state's guidance and funding, athletics will be more and more systematic. For instance, the retired sportsman can be a coach to guide the next generation in terms of how to improve their technique, how to overcome the difficulties and sufferings with their diligence, perseverance and strong belief. Anyway, the country will keep sustained development with strong and healthy people.

And then, in contrast to athletics,arts is also important as I have ever said that art can raise one's sentiment. People can also express their feelings or minds through the form of art. Except for this, art exhibits the natural beauty, culture and characteristics of a nation, too.

At last but not least, I think people shouldn't have the bias on each domain of the society nowadays. To a country, every positive fields are vital and necessary and have their meaning of existence. It is the best not to neglect each field, therefore, arts, athletics and other domains which haven't been talked here should be seemed as equal status.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, except for, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, first of all, in contrast to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97178683386 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65321568356 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58934169279 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6218282435 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2941176471 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7647058824 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183206282682 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551329797287 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550945621924 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102976768056 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691443764077 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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