TPO 44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are rela

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TPO 44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In my opinion, if parents don’t have much time with their children, they would spend only time on relaxing with kids, no matter which form of entertainment they will join in. And my reasons will be listed as follows:

First of all, children need to relax and adjust their state after long-time studying. In china, a high school student usually spend more than 8 hours on studying per day, and more than 5 days per week. Their learning burdens are very heavy. If parents always mention schoolwork at their few leisure time, it is equivalent to increase children’s burden. Why not have fun with kids such as hiking, watching movie or playing badminton. It’s a good way to free children’s mind as well as parents’. After relaxing, they will all have a better state to study or work.

Except for the aforementioned reason, having fun with children is also a good chance to improve the relationship between parent and child, especially for those busy parents. Usually, busy parents don’t have much time to communicate with their kid. As a result, they don’t know what their child think about. Hence, the poor communication will cause contradiction between parent and kid. If parent take the child to have fun, it will form a extremely different consequence. For example, my father went back home once a week when I was a high school student. However, he never mentioned schoolwork when he came back. He always took me to play basketball or watched NBA games with me if rained. Even though he is busy, our relationship is perfect. We have same hobbies so that we talk a lot to each other. I was relaxed at weekend, so when I started to study on Monday, I was confident to overcome all the difficulties on studying.

Last but not least, it’s unnecessary for parent to spend time on things related to schoolwork with children. Nowadays, with the emergency of learning robot and online teaching class, children have many approach to study independently. It may be more efficient because parents are not professional teachers. They just guide their kids through their own knowledge and experience.

All in all, I support that busy parent pay more attention to have fun with children. Playing with children not only relax them but also improve the relationship with them. Additionally, parents’ guidance may not be effective.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ake the child to have fun, it will form a extremely different consequence. For ex...
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Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun approach seems to be countable; consider using: 'many approaches'.
Suggestion: many approaches
...nd online teaching class, children have many approach to study independently. It may be more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, except for, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00506329114 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85581964003 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556962025316 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5371123601 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0384615385 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1923076923 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34615384615 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276848959026 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787939799861 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648910368834 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177356891118 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0123100575009 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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