TPO 47 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As a young man, I’m curious about not only what happened but also the appearance of new things or advanced technology around the world. Additionally, through keeping an eye on information of happening events, it can broaden my horizon and maybe make me interested in a new field. Hence, I think it is necessary to concern what happened all around the world, no matter whether these events will affect our life.
To begin with, we may learn more knowledge from the events happening around the world. For example, I once noticed a news which mainly introduced the advent of 3D printer. It triggered my curiosity because I wanted to know what is it. Next, I used search engine to find some contexts about this new product. After a while, I understood what is this creative printer and how does it work. Therefore, if someone mention 3D printer later, I won’t know nothing about it.
In addition to the aforementioned reason, we will be interested in a new field through caring about the newly-happened events and eventually we seem it as our another new hobby. Take myself as an example, when I was 8, basketball meant nothing to me. One day I saw a NBA game on the TV, it deeply drew my attention. I was amazed by the performance of T-MAC, he gained 13 scores in the last 35 seconds meanwhile helped the team win the game. From then on, I got strongly interested in this sport. I took part in a basketball class held by my PE teacher and played basketball almost everyday until now.
All in all, except for the reasons I supposed, there are likely some other benefits. So I firmly support the idea that it is vital to care about what happened in the earth, even though these events may not affect our everyday life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...how does it work. Therefore, if someone mention 3D printer later, I won't know not...
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Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er, I won't know nothing about it. In addition to the aforementioned reason...
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Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ball meant nothing to me. One day I saw a NBA game on the TV, it deeply drew my a...
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Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...PE teacher and played basketball almost everyday until now. All in all, except for th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, while, except for, for example, i suppose, i think, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60841423948 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61422177453 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614886731392 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0185319203 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7647058824 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177902375394 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509708154316 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599301364429 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112882174729 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415027281512 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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