TPO 56 iNDIPENDENT TASK
The contemporary world nowadays is full of new technologies every day which helps people to keep their invaluable properties more secure. Previously, when someone lost its camera or documents accidentally, it was neither, possible nor accessible to bring them back. Nowadays, social media allow us to keep a record of our precious experiences online, not only for memories but also for documents. I prefer to keep them on social networks due to many useful options of this like fast accessibility and also for the security I think this method affords. I will talk about my reasons in more elaboration and explain them more in continue.
First, let’s take a look at how the fast accessibility of the records can help. Nowadays, we all have many pictures and videos on our cellphones and we can easily post them on social media. In this way, not only do we make our communication with our friends deeper as we share our moment, but we also keep that pictures as an album on our personal page. In some new meetings, we can easily open our page like the personal page of Instagram, and start sharing our memories with new people. Additionally, by having a scan of some documents on our phone, we can immediately make access to them. From my own experience, when I needed to register in an office for my exam and I forgot to take my ID card physically, I sent the scan using Icloud to one of the officers, and my problem was solved easily. Accordingly, I think this option is one of the most important ones which help us make life easier.
Apart from the accessibility, I think uploading on social media is more secure to keep the records. When a catastrophic situation comes to happen, like an earthquake, house burning, robbery, etc, we may lose all of our printed albums or even laptop or phone in that event. with this in mind, we can still keep our memories documented securely when we know we have a record of them in our Google drive or iCloud and we feel deeply confident this way. For example, in the near past, the robber came to our house and robbed my laptop one week after I defended my Masters's degree dissertation. I still didn't have given my last versions to the university. Thanks to Google drive, I did have access to them and the university allowed me to be graduated. Therefore, uploading can help us to keep necessary documents and pictures more always in touch no matter what happens.
All in all, if all the factors are contemplated, I think this innovation can not only make human life easier, but also it can be helpful in many other ways. when we can take advantage of that, why not use it?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...an easily post them in social media. By this ways, not only we make our communicatio...
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...r moment, we also keep that pictures as a album in our personal page. In some new...
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...we may lose all of our printed albums or even laptop or phone in that event. with...
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...or even laptop or phone in that event. with this in mind, we can still keep our mem...
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...my Masters degree dissertation. I still didnt have given my last versions to the univ...
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...o it can be helpful in many other ways. when its possible for us to take the advanta...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, apart from, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60638297872 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66807238112 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4956432028 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.095238095 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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