In the modern world, in which technology is flourishing at a galoping rate, social media has transformed the whole universe to a small village. This means people can connect to eachother and share their ideas by social media. Keeping this in mind, some people prefer to share their lifestyle and experiences with others using different sites and applications; others hold the view that privacy is of high importance and they avoid uploaing photos. I consider myself in the former group and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people can benefit from other people's experiences, and this can help them decide better in their life. Experience is a priceless gift that a person can give others because it helps people to use their time better. To clarify, when people share their experience from traveling to different places around the world, it can help others to get familiar with the pros and cons of traveling to those region. people can understand the expenses, the spectacular sceneries, diverse food and cultures, and other things in differenet regions. Needless to say, it can help a person who wants to go to travel to choose where to go, and it gives him or her an invaluable insight. Therefore, sharing experiences pave the way for people to decide better in their life.
Secondly, when people upload their photos and experiences, they can use this data after many years and use them. This has a siginificant benefits: saving data in memory cards is highly risky because the memory card can be broken or damaged. As a result, one can loose the whole information. But, by uploading the information to a reputable site, people can make sure that they can access to their data whenever they want and it is safe. Take a personal experience as an example: last year I went to honeymoon and I had the best time in my life there. I uploaded some of my photos to share my moments with my friend. My photos were really important for me and I saved them. But my laptop was broken and if i have not shared my photos, I would not have them now.
In conclusion, taking into account what was already mentioned, I beleive that sharing information through reputable platform has some amazing consequenses that anyone can be persuade to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this region' or 'those regions'?
Suggestion: this region; those regions
... with the pros and cons of traveling to those region. people can understand the expenses, th...
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Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
... and cons of traveling to those region. people can understand the expenses, the specta...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...broken or damaged. As a result, one can loose the whole information. But, by uploadin...
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Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'persuade' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...onsequenses that anyone can be persuade to do so.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77215189873 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61575961542 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539240506329 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6295307375 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2105263158 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218582465278 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731107508361 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715185783978 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135096053576 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683926110854 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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