TPO 7
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Students should be taught ideas and concepts and be aware of them. Basically, a lot people think that education is about memorize plenty of informations, but it is not. The following essay will be supporting this statement.
To begin with, Learning process is a complicated topic with a lot of forbidden contex. Despite the fact that It seems to be about storing as much data as possible into student’s memory, It’s about training educator’s brain to be able to treat data in advanced strategy. It could be simplified in a few steps like : collecting data, understanding and linking relations between these data, analysing and finding results. At the end, making some decision if needed.
Secondly, People usually are known for their shortage to save information for long time. So it doesn’t make sense to store something in a place you already knew it would not be saved in it. For instance, Personally I don't remember the majority of the subjects that I have studied in the primary school. Evenmore, I don't even remember my first grade teacher name. In the other hand, I still carry a lot of concepts that I’ve been directed at, like commitment to be on time for obligations.
Based on the previous essay. I believe that ideas are way important than just save TMI which will not last.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 141, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ct that It seems to be about storing as much data as possible into student’s memory,...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...saved in it. For instance, Personally I dont remember the majority of the subjects t...
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Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...died in the primary school. Evenmore, I dont even remember my first grade teacher na...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1077.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 222.0 407.700716846 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85135135135 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71296371759 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.68018018018 0.524837075471 130% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 618.680645161 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4964960409 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9285714286 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8571428571 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180544304699 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552034963261 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472881318026 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991331751863 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248691386881 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.