There is a great debate about the regulations of advertising instructions including the legal target audiences and the concept of marketing affairs. Many sociologists say commercial programs should not directed to under five years age children because of many adverse consequences and I agree with this idea because of some reasons.
First of all, many psychological researches indicate human being can make decision in eighteen years old or after that so the young kids who are under five years do not have any ability to distinguish the optimum choices. Scientists say kids just select objects emotionally and the specific part of their brain which helps in logical deciding process. For example many companies use the characters in famous cartoons in order to catch these potential customers because they love their idols in animation products and blindly follow whatever these interesting heroes promote.
Furthermore, based on medical reports many products particularly edible types are detrimental to young kids and several experts who are active in health fields of societies criticize about the goods that marketers want to advertise. According to their attempts and media pressure many people conclude the category of marketing items should be limited for this range of age and manufacturing units can not offer anything. For instance, when I was child my parents did not let me to watch junk foods commercial during the television programs because they had concerns about ingredients and healthy features.
Additionally, business insights prove the children under five years old spend the most amount of time in comparison with the other segments because they are always at home and have the maximum spare time. Hence governments should restrict the advertisements to the most available consumers which are easily convinced by the techniques of promotional activities. For example, when my little four years old brother was all the time watching the cartoons and attracted to some sugar foods which were introduced to him and wanted from us to buy those goods and we decided to ban him from being in front of television.
In conclusion, this is undoubtedly harmful for our nations to be careless about controlling the advertising methods for kids because they are the future of our communities and we should manage those both in concept and procedures. Albeit many persons have valuable endeavor to stop promoting to this particular age.
- TPO-11 - Integrated Writing Task A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature,novels, plays, and poems,than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for70
- TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you80
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.76
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- TPO 42- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.35
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32904884319 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79132635708 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598971722365 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.6744331782 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.461538462 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9230769231 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16601202363 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554704559661 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422176945771 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942051095435 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351438501572 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
automated_readability_index: 18.6 11.7677419355 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.