TPO-9:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, it has been a hot topic on whether technology has done damages to people. Some people believe that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past, some people hold the opposite opinion. As far as I am concerned, I disagree that technology let children become less creative.
First of all, technology contributes to the improving quality of education in the society, thus providing children with more chance to develop their potential creativeness. For example, my young cousins are all very skillful at using computers because they started to learn computer course since they were at first grade of elementary school and my little brother even managed to use computer to compose Hiphop music by his own, without needing any traditional music class. This would not have happened if the technology didn't improve over the years. I still remember when I was at their age, I just started to learn how to type and send emails using the old fashioned big computers and never imagined I could other stuff using computers.
Moreover, technology provides children with more tools to broaden their horizon, thus making them more creative. The new technologies, such as 3D movies, AR helmet and automatic robot , are all good tools for children to explore the world and broaden their horizon. For example, with 3D movies and AR helmet, children can feel more real about the story in a movie so that they could develop better imagination. They can also cultivate their interest in automation designing and improve their creativeness by interacting with the robot.
Last but not least, technology provides children a more efficient channel to obtain a variety of knowledge, which is very important in developing their creativeness. For example, nowadays when a young kid find himself interested in coding, he can easily find the learning materials and tutorial video online because of the development of the internet. While a few decades ago, if a kid wanted to explore a new thing, he will find it very hard to get instruction without the internet and this will probably stopped him from learning new things.
All in all, I disagree that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past with the reasons stated above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05333333333 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65227588964 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562666666667 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.351530695 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242319832816 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927649837656 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104806840221 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181296929514 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138815352015 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.