do you agree or disagree with the following statement? technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We all know technology is a large portion of our life. Indeed our life has been somehow inwoven with technology. Our daily works, business, relationships, and so on, are knotted with such momentous technological instruments. Some people believe that if children get engaged with technology, their creativity might be negatively influenced by it. However, despite all of the respect for their opinion, I strongly disagree with this idea that technology makes children less creative for a couple of reasons:
To begin with, many effective technological instruments help children to find and flourish their talents. Also, these instruments push and make them much more creative. The Internet is an ingenious achievement of technology that helps them to be in touch with each other, sum up their ideas up, and make fabulous outputs. For instance, my son has created a beautiful, smart boat in collaboration with his virtual colleague from Netherland; they had had contact, interaction, or even brainstorm with each other through the Internet.
Moreover, how the thing which itself is offspring of creativity could be destructive? In my opinion, not only technology doesn’t restrict children’s mind and never makes them less creative, but also it could be intellectually constructive for them. There are many educational technology tools to show the true direction of creativity. They come up with the various types of ingenious solutions to make our children think more creative. I remember when I was so younger, I used to use an old woody car to play. At my 14 years old birthday, my father gave me a design tool that could make one capable of building anything anyway one would like. This magic toy changed all of my mind, and my mind was preoccupied with how could I construct a creative firm structure to tolerate heavy things. And Today, the child who had tried to make such a robust construction a long time ago is a civil engineer because of this precious gift.
But, I should acknowledge that parents’ concern about some technological outputs is perceivable. In addition to its smooth and positive side, Anything could be able to have an unknown dark side. It depends on the usage method. For example, a laser could be used to cure someone or maybe used as a dangerous killer weapon. In a nutshell, in my opinion, not only technology never makes children less creative, but also it could be intellectually constructive for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10669975186 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00374232694 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590570719603 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7911051494 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16041875389 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487095706785 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400685970285 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106600920198 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314924860936 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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