Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on a cell phone, online games and social networking web site. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The current decade is the information and technology era. Electronic devices are more available and inexpensive than in past decades, and a large portion of people could easily afford their desired equipment. These are dramatically increasing electronic devices emerges with various kind of games, social applications, and so forth. But these striking changes lead to an essential question of whether advance technology innovations are helpful or harmful, for example, in the educational aspect of their contact’s life. However, I firmly agree with the statement that educating children is more difficult today than it was in the past. I feel this way for a couple of reasons: a waste of time problem and incapability of concentration on education.
First of all, as I mentioned before, the present era, the especially current decade is along with tremendous changes in technology and its achievements. There are many online games, smartphones, and many ingenious applications that are conducted by artificial intelligence. A large portion of children engage or involve with such a and spend their time to play, web sites, and social networks. So there is no left time to spend in the direction of their educational purpose. Take my son, for example. Before I buy a tablet for him as his birthday gift, he usually used to do his homework first. But right after this event, he has modified entirely and has changed his prioritize about his educational task. Recently I have to prevent or prohibit him from even touch his tablet.
Second, because of such useless ridicule devices and games they behavior also have influenced negatively. You can see that easily, contemporary children do not care about their educational problems and are getting gradually incapable of concentrating on their course and class. The main topic of their discussion is various kinds of games and social networks. Such a trifle things have occupied their mind entirely. My son's school has held a meeting with their student parents about this fact that today, children are much more vulnerable against technology because of its significant growth, and they warn parents about possible adverse consequences of educating ignorance.
In a nutshell, I have discussed above the difficulty of today’s children's education in comparison with past children, and I have given my approval on this topic. Hence, I have given a couple of reasons to support my idea.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, for example, i feel, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28388746803 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92953997407 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570332480818 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.466121236 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.380952381 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268493476026 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071688484354 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831020795829 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148641415672 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316122783944 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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