Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the extended family is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Families are the rudimentary and most prestigious groups of each society, and as we know, each family has a hierarchy. This hierarchy started with first-degree members like parents and siblings, keeps gone second-degree members I mean uncles and aunts and through uncles and aunts, their children and forth. This hierarchy identifies a priority to you to figures out your interaction level with your expanded family members. However, most recently, some issues have happened, thereby less prioritized interaction is getting weak gradually and then collapsed. So, I strongly agree with the statement, and I have some reasons to support my idea.
To begin with, I should mention that social reports indicate that in the very recent decade's people are overwhelmed by many challenges in their daily life, and their minds are preoccupied with finding a solution to their problems. Hence, they have no time to interact with their less prioritized family members. Take me, for instance. I have to go to work every morning at 6:00 AM and come back home 6:00 PM while I’m exhausted. I have to work hard, first of all, to preserve my job’s niche firmly and to take a promotion to earn more money to afford my life’s costs in such an expensive city. So there is no left any time to interact with less prioritized members, and consciously or unconsciously, they will be less important to me.
Moreover, electronic devices and social networks and apps diminish the rate of face to face interaction among people and their less prioritized family members. This issue makes your less prioritized family member a virtual entity, and, likely, you would rather interact with them just through a virtual space. Take my son, for example. Since we bought a tablet to him as his birthday gift, he always plays with his electronic device and postpones his cousin’s invitation to play and says I’ll call them later, and we know it would never happen. It means his game time is much more valuable than his cousin. Change in values is another reason for this issue. Thereby in real life, they would lose their value and get less critical to you. You may send a message to them or have a greeting with them as a daily habit, but it is only a habit. Our habits gradually changed and get less critical pass through time.
In a nutshell, I strongly agree with the statement that expanded family members are getting less important because of people's overwhelming issues, changing values, and excessive engaging with electronic devices and virtual space.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i mean, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02112676056 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65799439544 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553990610329 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3765006328 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.857142857 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194558314202 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621281860974 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057661723443 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137025460287 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382216538538 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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