Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their community. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As we know, young people with fresh ideas are enthusiastic about joining a team or group activities. If we train them in the respective field of our community’s need, they could emerge beneficially. However, the main question is, have they been allowed to show their ability or not? In other words, have young people enough time to help their community or not? in my opinion, they have sufficient time to help their community. I have some reasons to support my claim: the government has paid attention to them nowadays more than the past to make them participate in communication's activities, and entrepreneurs have created many job opportunities for them and have supported them because they believe their fresh ideas could be fascinating and very helpful in their community’s progression.
First of all, as I have just mentioned before, the government believes that young people are a significant portion of society and if the government pays adequate attention to them and teaches or recruits them in a way that the community needs, they could be precious helpful human supply. Hence the government teaches them and gives them appropriate time/chance to show how they could be useful. While in the past young people used to be ignored. Take our team, for example. We are computer engineers who have been had a contribution to the part of a software development project by government .it means an excellent opportunity or enough time to show we are helpful.
Second, entrepreneurs incline to invest in young people more than ever. They think that fresh ideas of young people are based on today’s needs and they could cope with new problems readily than old forces and they have much more chance to come up with helpful ideas. It means again; the young people have adequate time to help their society. Take my group back as an example. In addition to government support, we have some entrepreneurs champion that provides capital for our new ideas on their examination.
All in all, I have discussed above that whether young people have enough time to be helpful for their society or not, and I have demonstrated that yes, they have. Thereby to support my idea, I have given two reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0027027027 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82982136716 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475675675676 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.2927929332 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.833333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185817938436 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795960308642 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642278414739 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131782014515 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306014750033 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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