Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? playing computer games is a waste of time. children should not be allowed to play them. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As we know, the contemporary decade (current era) belongs to the computer, and computer game revolution, where a combination of realism and fiction is exhibited by computer game producers which may tempt any gamer. Almost in every house, a type of computer devices such as Personal Computer, Laptop or a smartphone is in touch. Also, it is undeniable that nowadays, a computer game has had an attractive place among our children. About the presented statement, I strongly agree with computer games is a waste of time for the following reasons:
To begin with, as a psychologist, I should wrong you about addiction to computer games. Our children play computer games hours and hours without taking care of their other tasks, like doing homework or cleaning their rooms. Indeed lake of any schedule or responsibility in their daily life is gradually emerged and then occupies a considerable portion of their time, this is a waste of time. In some instances, it has been observed that children get a very low grade or even fail their school because of game addiction phenomenon. So, if you like your children, you should/had better take care of them against such conceal or even embed perils.
Moreover, our children have a passive role in computer games; it means they sit and stare hours and hours on the screen of their computer without any activity, this issue is a serious threat to their health. Medicine science has proved again and again that if you sit on more than a certain amount of time, you are much more prone to illness, in addition to a waste of time issue, it means money dissipation too. Take one of my colleague, Lara, for instance; she used to be game addicted when she was only a ten years old girl. Because of such a passive act, she has been undergone backache for more than seven years.in addition, she is somehow anxious, and she is struggling with Phobia. If you are interested or doubtful, There are some medical journals in the psychology area to invoke.
In a nutshell, I believe that you should take care of your children against any probable damage to computer games. As a suggestion If you are not capable of preventing your child, you had better provide educational or at least non-violent games for them to diminish the negative effect of computer games on your dear children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...doing homework or cleaning their rooms. Indeed lake of any schedule or responsibility ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, then, at least, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81954887218 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63944402901 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538847117794 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.0510807711 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.2 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315693122173 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998351423803 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687608416411 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191642492317 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446004228992 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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