Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take a risk rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Newspapers, magazines, and various kinds of media every day talk about successful people and how they get deserved and capable of attaining such as dream niches and properties. We know some prominent people who are big companies owners Like Bill Gates and Zuckerberg, and so forth. But how? How could they acquire successfulness? Did they make venture decisions or not? I firmly agree with the statement that they prefer to try new things and take the risk rather than only doing what they know how to do for a couple of reasons: not only new something donates you useful rewards but also makes you more confident that your goals are achievable.
First of all, if you try new things, you would come up with much more useful experience and practical intellectual views that are very helpful during your attempts to attain your goals and thrust you forward. Take me, For example. I’m a stock market interpreter, and usually, I used to prefer to deal with internal merchants. Still, recently, I have changed my point of about foreign merchants, and I have some very prosper deals that make a tremendous benefit for me. According to my last experiments, I’m able to have signed contracts with well-known import and export companies, and I think all of these prosperities lay in my strength valuable experience.
Moreover, if you do things that you know how to do after a while, it makes you bored; in fact, you would lose you confident about doing new things. Hence you are more prone to disappointment in doing new things. As a result, you would be denounced to failure. I had a very conservative friend who has invested huge money in the bank. I had invited him to concentrates his principal capital on Gold, but because of his conventional belief, he refused my offer. Recently the Gold price has impressive growth, and his cash money’s value diminished severely. Now he is not confident even about regular trade and investment that he had done before.
In a nutshell, I suppose that reason risky decisions are a bridge to successfulness, but if you accept to cross over the bridge to attain prosperity. Hence, I believe that successful people try new things and take the risk rather than only doing what they know how to do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 149, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e you confident about doing new things. Hence you are more prone to disappointment in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, for example, i suppose, i think, in fact, such as, you know, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86493506494 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72990102173 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9008781706 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5789473684 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84210526316 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447418747392 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11867648802 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165073963669 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292829857091 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143943837753 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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