Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it’s more important for the government to spending money on the education of very young children (five years old) than spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There many factors that are very important and crucial to the development of a country. One most essential element that has a considerable impact on this issue is the right investment for the future. The future of a country usually will be built by its young people and expert agents. So if administrate members of a country intend to have a developed and pioneer country, they had better take care of their investment, which means training new experts agents. However, I firmly disagree with the statement that for the successful development of a country, it’s more important for the government to spending money on the education of very young children than spend money on universities. I have some reasons to support my idea: first, there are many trained experts in university, and universities are the industrial heart of each country and can retrieve and make money.
First of all, as I mentioned before, there are many trained experts in universities that are available to be hired to significantly wag the industrial of a country and make progress in various industrial aspects. Take the University of Tehran, for instance. Many graduated students had been trained and taught to develop the industrial of Iran. Different kinds of experts from engineers to biologists and so forth that are capable of making a long process in their field. These are universities and their expert outcomes that help a country to make progress.
Second, by the investment of universities, the government could make money by the innovative invention of universities. Every year universities introduce many useful designs in if their devices get commercial, they could attain a vast amount of money. Not only this is no waste of money, but also it would make money. For example, last year, superior defense universities have invested in a military project to generate an ultrasound device to detect the enemy’s airplane, and the project was successful. Not only they saved money inside their country, but also they can expose and trade this device to other states and make money.
In a nutshell, I have discussed the subject of how a right and wisdom investment would develop a country. I believe that for the successful development of a country, it’s more important for the government to spend money on universities instead of spending money on the education of very young children (five years old)and I have brought some reasons to support my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'will' and 'be'.
Suggestion: will usually be
...for the future. The future of a country usually will be built by its young people and expert ag...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11633663366 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87257887468 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477722772277 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8177530525 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.833333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392521422014 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126687042718 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190937444879 0.0737576698707 259% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265422193857 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169161870285 0.0645574589148 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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