Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to a foreign country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Traveling is an important reciprocal issue to the traveler and its host. Every year a large number of people go on a trip with their family and friends to enjoy their leisure time. In recent years traveling and tourism issue has called the attention of many investors and entrepreneurs to itself, and they have been trying to attract more tourist through various kind of media and ads. I strongly agree with the statement that people will benefit more from traveling in their own country than from going to a foreign country, and I have some reasons to support my idea.
First of all, meanwhile of travel, people have to pay money to afford their travel costs and attain some basic facilities like shelter, food and so forth. So, what will happen if we could persuade people to travel internally and inject such a large supply of money to our country's economic cycle? It has many positive aftermaths, and many job opportunities will be created and help to decrease the unemployment problem somehow. For example, Kish island in Iran, suitable ads help and lead to much more internal traveler go to Kish, thereby island’s development happened very quickly, and now it is an outstanding destination to travel.
Second, on a foreign trip, a traveler has to use many facilities to enjoy his/her trip, like a tour guide, a translator, and so forth. The facilities are not free, and it means you have to pay money. While on an internal trip you would be able to save much more money and without need to a translator, you could have interaction with people. Last year I went on a foreign trip to the UK, and I had to pay excessive money to a tour guide to help see historical buildings and museums very well. After my trip, with a straightforward calculation, I realize that my trip just was a squandering one, and I would be able to travel with half my foreign travel’s cost. Moreover, the weather was cloudy, that had made me gloomy!
Although a foreign trip could be amazing and you can share your culture with them and vice versa, but it’s costly and not seems economical to traveler’s country. In a nutshell, I agree with the statement because of the mentioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...o the traveler and its host. Every year a large number of people go on a trip with their family a...
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Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
... to enjoy their leisure time. In recent years traveling and tourism issue has called ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78010471204 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71483512588 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53664921466 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.6393213312 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.733333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4666666667 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340048703315 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11660812538 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123105723205 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214414578662 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106047588517 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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