Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teacher than by their friends. Use specific examples and reasons to support your answer.
There are many internal and external stimuli that student's behavior is constructed and influenced based on them. The most crucial external factor is people who students have interaction with, such as family members, teachers, friends, and so forth. But students are more influenced by which one? Particularly between their teachers and their friends, is a question that we are going to address below. I firmly believe that their friends more influence students because of who is the person that they spend more time with and convenience feeling reasons.
First of all, I should mention that the person that students spend their large portion of their time with, consciously or unconsciously, has much more influence on student's behavior. Friends are people who students prefer to be with them and are with them. Take my son, Asghar, for instance. He often would rather play, talk, and spend his time with his cousin, Reza, and their behavior resembles each other. They see their teacher four days a week, while they usually are with each other all over the week from morning to evening. Of course, I should acknowledge that we are a neighbor.
Moreover, we should explore who students are convenience with to talk about their problems and secrets. I think because students and their friends are in the same age spectrum (range), they feel much more convenience to talk to each other than someone like teachers. I remember when I was a student, I used to talk about my dreams, nightmares, and so forth with my friend, Ali. We usually had encouraged each other to cope with our problems to make our dreams real. I even remember we have called each other pilot Farhad and Dr. Ali. You may get surprised, but now I’m a pilot, and he is a doctor.
In a nutshell, I should mention that I have discussed student's influences subject, and I have demonstrated that in my point of view, students are more influenced by their friends than their teacher because of time and convenience feeling issues. Nevertheless, undoubtedly, teachers have their influence on students but not as same or much as their friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...many internal and external stimuli that students behavior is constructed based on them. ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...consciously, has much more influence on students behavior. Friends are people who studen...
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...ir teacher four days a week, while they usually are with each other all over the week from ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w I'm a pilot, and he is a doctor. In a nutshell, I should say that in my p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, for instance, i think, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90087463557 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55214802234 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495626822157 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7124910219 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4736842105 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321126445922 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112993426418 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895241035673 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242496222143 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751939363875 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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