Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People of all over the world unanimously agree that financial responsibility is the most critical factor that directly has an impact on their quality of life. It means if you have money, So, you are responsible for the financial aspect of your life. You have everything that you want if you could have money. But how you could acquis such vital skill and how much does it take time to be responsible are two questions that will be clarified the statement at the following discussion for you. I strongly agree with the statement that children should learn to manage their own money to be responsible for their financial problems. I have some reasons to support my agreement.
First of all, it takes a long time to acquis adequate skills to earn and manage the money. Also, you have to learn how could you have a proper investment in preserving your capital and getting much more responsible for a vast area of your financial problems. This learning process does not attain quickly, and it means again, it will take your time. So, doesn’t it seem it is better to learn how to manage your money since you are young? The answer is obviously yes. In this way, you can spend your time relatively to improve other aspects of your life, too. Take me, for instance. I have been working since I was just a 12 years old child, and I have learned many valuable techniques. Now, I’m a prominent carpet merchant, and I have a carpet-Weaving company. Not only I’m responsible for my financial problems, but I’m also an outstanding entrepreneur in my field of work. I should acknowledge that I owe my prosperity to this on-time start to learn how to manage my capital(money).
Moreover, young people have a very keen learning ability. This ability to acquis such a critical skill, I guess I mean money managing issues, would be decreased as much as you get older. So it seems better to start to learn as soon as possible if you want to be responsible for your financial problems very well. Is a 40 years old man's learnability exactly as same as a young person? Definitely no.
In a nutshell, As I mentioned before, I strongly agree with the statement that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age because of time limitations and learnability problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...u could acquis such vital skill and how much does it take time to be responsible are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, i guess, i mean, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7275 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73069473761 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4725 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5329580298 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9545454545 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346060141551 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103755501827 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985046996239 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253746330449 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910199548203 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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