Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern world, video games are an inseparable part of the children's lives. Personally, I believe that the adverse effects of computer games are more than their benefits. I fell this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, playing video games have lots of destructive effects on children. This is because computer games contain such violent scenes in them, which affect children's behavior. As a result, young people will behave with rage and anger with the community. These days, however, there are many attractive computer games that absorb the attention of the children. For instance, my cousin spends plenty of time playing computer games. He is very overwhelming with war and assassin types of games. Consequently, his behavior among our family originated from the games which he plays. Although his parents did a lot to control his situation, they did not make it well.
Secondly, playing video games is addictive to children, so parents should not let them spend their time on these hobbies. Although the companies which producing computer games always show this material very fancy to children, in fact, these are not good how they were shown. Young people pay out most of their free time with this stuff, so they do not have enough time to do their homework. For example, our nine-years-old neighbour's kid when came back home from his school always sitting behind his computer to do his games. Therefore, his homework is usually undone, and his grades in school are becoming low.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that computer games have ruinous effects on children's lives. This is because video games have lots of severe scenes, and they are addictive for children that spend more of their time with these things.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00673400673 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45006357152 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535353535354 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6602218808 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.6111111111 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226679049385 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812144645312 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563370240738 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146756733155 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418693010628 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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