Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology is a very important part of our life. Many things are invented which change our daily life and made our lives more comfortable. I am sure some people would believe that playing computer games is a waste of time, others would disagree. In my view, playing computer games is a waste of time for two reasons.
First, children's brains won't develop enough. It is very necessary for children to interact with others, talk to them, play outside. By doing such activity they have more chances to grow, they ave an opportunity to learn new things from different people. For example, I was reading an article regarding how computer games destroyed children's life. They did mention that a couple of years ago children used to play outside with other kids, they use to go out with a friend and most of the time they used to do the outside activities. Because of that children were very active and had knowledge about the outside world. And in today's world children are playing games most of the time, they don't have friends, they always busy with their computer, they don't even know how to make a new friend, how to communicate with people, their brain does not develop completely. This example clearly taught me that playing computer games is a waste of time, children won't develop completely.
Second, children won't learn how to communicate with other people, they have a hard time socializing. It is very important to communicate with other people. For instance, my niece plays games on the computer all the time, and she stays home most of the time, so if any guest comes to her house she gets scared, she doesn't know how to react. This is because she plays games on the computer and doesn't know how to interact with other people. This example taught me that computer will destroy your time, it won't give the opportunity to learn how to communicate with other people.
In sum, though some may oppose the idea computer games is a waste of time. Not only, children's minds won't develop but also they can not learn how to communicate with other people. Children should not allow playing computer games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76902173913 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34098332293 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464673913043 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6814603248 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.75 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31055954 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118972162846 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885761123954 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213863573264 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03859089982 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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