Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an undeniable fact that technology has affected our lives in a way that is out of control. A controversial question that is often raised in this regard is whether or not our children's creativity has been influenced by widespread technology. Although some may believe that it boosts children's creativity, I have the opposite point of view. The most visual and less practical aspect of technology, as well as its dominance in the promotion of the luxury lifestyle, has made our children less creative.
First and foremost, It is crystal clear that people, especially the younger generation, have more access to the visual aspects of the technology rather than its practical usage. For instance, we see the utilization of state-of-the-art technology in several movies and media. If an individual has not entangled with the practical aspects of technology, how creativity improves in this person? Creativity comes from dealing with the challenges that we face during real projects, not just watching technologies’ brilliance.
Secondly, technology has changed our way of life, way of thinking, and way of tackling the problems. Traditionally, people work together, and in time of facing new challenges, they cooperate to find creative solutions. However, nowadays, the majority of the individuals work independently in such an isolated environment, which is one of the so-called blessings of the technology, how an individual may come across creative, innovative, and practical answers? Children spend their free time playing online games or passively watching futuristic movies. How could creativity emerge in the condition that a new lifestyle has limited dynamic actions?
To sum up, I think it is now clear that technology besides its convenience for a human being, has promoted an inactive lifestyle and more observatory actions for most of the younger generation. In these conditions, the chance of development of novel ideas is decreasing since all of the problems seem to be solved by others, and there is no practical task for the young to be faced with.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... that is often raised in this regard is whether or not our childrens creativity has been influ...
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Suggestion:
...n the promotion of the luxury lifestyle, has made our children less creative. ...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
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...ment of novel ideas is decreasing since all of the problems seem to be solved by others, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i think, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36778115502 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15223800323 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577507598784 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9169109455 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.733333333 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139535398122 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459261130032 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251324531127 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815286935889 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342239820115 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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