Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Financial management is one of the essential requirements of a successful life that everybody should acquire. Some people believe that we should instil these abilities into the young children in order to they achieve financial responsibility as an adult; however, others do not believe in this issue and think that these abilities gradually obtained by the individuals. Considering the paramount importance of financial management in our life, I am inclined to the former attitude.
Firstly, In a fast-changing world, the financial responsibility of adults makes them more conservative in terms of spending on various subjects. Teaching invaluable experiences, which comes from financial experiences, like how to spend on something and how to avoid squandering money on trivial subjects, is of great importance. If Children gain this knowledge, they are more likely to be a responsible adult financially. By allocating a limited amount of money monthly, they will find the best way to manage their expenditures.
On the other hand, If children find anything they want immediately, they cannot learn how difficult it is to gain money. They should feel the limitation of resources, this feeling does not contradict with the supportive responsibility of parents; while, teaching children future responsibilities. Achieving financial independence requires some hardship, but children, who have practised the financial matters from younger ages, would reach it easily.
To sum up, teaching some vital information that comes from experience is hard; nevertheless, children should acquire them from a young age. Otherwise, children have to pay much more to be financially responsible. They may find it hard to spend limited money that comes in regular intervals; however, they learn the significant skill of financial management. A very famous proverb states that " no pain, no gain."
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64111498258 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21279296424 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599303135889 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5012623442 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.642857143 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242846177268 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812939586804 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330801878588 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149040527311 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025109091887 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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