TPO17-Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are
over the past few decades, the issue of whether advertisement exhibit products much better than they real quality has received a great deal of attention from people and sociologists. Although some may argue that the basis of the advertisement is to show the products much better than what they really are, I as well as many others believe that most advertisements are misleading for people and they do not express the real quality of their products. The following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First of all, an important reason why advertisements do not show the reality of the products is that the companies should sell their products since they cannot express their products' drawbacks. people all around the world, beyond any shadow of doubts, always want to buy a perfect product and companies are enforced to conceal the products' flaws and exaggerate the merits of them. For instance, a show company for selling their shoes decide to advertise its product by expressing that these shoes will be work for five years. People may tempt to buy these shoes by the advertisement which may not be a reliance one.
A further reason for this view is that throughout these decades the technology has been drastically evolved. Consequently the competition between the companies to increase their financial benefits has led the enhancement in awareness of crucial role of expressing their products to attracting people. In addition, as the companies may produce the same supplies they have to exhibit its features through different ways which should be convincing to the consumers. Take laptop companies producer as an example, there are a large number of distinct brands of laptop in markets and all of them have great features. If costumers decide to buy a one, they might rely on a specific brand's advertisement about some specific characteristics and by its laptop.
In brief, contemplating all aforementioned reason above, one can draw the conclusion that most of the advertisement exaggerating to introduce the products chiefly due to competition between a great number of companies and to convince the people to buy these products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, really, so, well, for instance, in addition, in brief, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95346769554 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508571428571 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0436353274 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9230769231 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258845306474 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911794598369 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102339753899 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16837012788 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119332480816 0.0645574589148 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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