TPO18(independent)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Throughout history, our ancestors have made many efforts to socialize with other people in their communities given that we humans are social beings. Considering this tendency, schools are the second important community in which students participate and start socializing more widely with their classmates, friends as well as teachers outside of their family. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether students are more affected by their teachers or their friends. Although there might be some counterexamples about this claim, I would argue that friends have profound impacts on each other compared to their teachers or even their parents. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that children have a relatively close relationship with their friends rather than their teachers. In fact, they spend much time with their peers playing, studying and talking. They often may ask about their friends' ideas or feelings towards a specific issue with neither external forces nor limitation. Therefore, one can conclude that spending much time with friends will lead to their close friendship which is unquestionably influential on children as a trustable source of information. Consider my experience as an example which can shed some light on this issue. Consider my experience as an example which can shed some light on this issue. A few years ago, a student of mine was reluctant to complete his assignments before the expected time, yet I employed many methods to encourage him to practice more. Finally, his friend was the person who promoted him to devote more time and energy to his lessons since they trusted each other more than me as their mathematics teacher.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that there is not too much difference between peers in terms of age. In other words, they are mostly at the same age, and they can understand each other much better than their teachers who are at least ten years older than them. Children ranging from young child to adolescence would experience challenging and significant concerns according to their age, however; they may not be able to share these concerns with their parents or teachers because they would think these issues are not understandable for them. Thus, if we put ourselves in children’s shoes, we certainly would prefer someone who sympathizes with us rather than giving a piece of advice.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas that were presented above I believe that children are influenced mainly by their friends in comparison with their teachers since they are at the same age, and can trust them more. Let us hope more and more parents try to monitor their children’s friendship due to its undeniable important effect.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, in fact, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6780872394 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527233115468 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9511423584 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.473684211 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320529072649 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111115270503 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807437703402 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216661123153 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568133989846 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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