People benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries.
Traveling to the distant destinations was difficult and even unachievable in the past. Fortunately, during the last decades, transportation systems have experienced significant changes by the advent of technologies. Thanks to the modern transportation system, today, more and more people are traveling abroad than ever before. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to other countries. Although there might be some counterexamples, I argue that traveling abroad as a mean of communication is more beneficial to individuals. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that any discussion of this topic is bound to question the aims of travel. In other words, travel is an efficient way to transfer different cultures and traditions. So, people can take a trip not only for enjoying their time but also for having an adventure. One can visit foreign people with a completely different language, culture, and background. Consequently, they would be more informed about what is happening around them. Besides, we can introduce our culture to other lands, and attract foreigners to visit our country one day. It is a strategy by which people would contribute to the tourism industry which can bring economic prosperity.
The second rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that travel is a way whereby we can expand our horizons. As a rule, it is difficult to cope with unpredictable problems or obey social norms in a foreign country. Obviously, it is pretty challenging for everyone to adjust themselves to this new condition. Therefore, people may enjoy challenging cases which can help them to become more experienced. Take my own experience as an example. Last year, I traveled to EUA with my best friend. Unfortunately, she became sick, and I was the only one who was able to help. It was an exceptional situation that I have faced up to now since I had to take her to the hospital in another country. Finally, I did my best, and this experience increased my self-confidence.
To wrap it up, based on the reasons that were presented above I believe that the advantages of traveling abroad outweigh its drawbacks. In fact, people from different countries and cultures can communicate with each other, boost tourist industry even for their own country, and encounter challenging situations which can improve their personality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which can bring economic prosperity. The second rationale behind my opinion i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, if, may, second, so, therefore, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16543209877 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05103269201 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56049382716 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5515812666 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377587073282 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904048798 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137890670976 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23595371948 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146904239655 0.0645574589148 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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