TPO24 – Independent: A/D? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
During the last decades, the digital revolution has altered every facet of our personal lives. In fact, we are living in the era in which technologies are progressing at a fast pace, and parents are responsible for teaching their children how to set themselves apart from the crowd. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether parents can prepare their teenagers for their future life by promoting them to take a part-time job. However, there might be some counterexamples about this claim I would argue that working is the best way for teenagers to acquire experience and skills for their adult life. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The first prominent point to be mentioned is that this topic is bound to question the importance of interpersonal skills in a person's success. It is an undeniable fact that no one can convey his ideas even the most creative ones without communication in our communication-based world. Considering this fact, parents should encourage their children to socialize with other people so that they will improve their social skills. Besides, communication with people both in a formal way and in the workplace would be a different experience for teenagers. In this regard, parents can give their children a once-in-a-lifetime chance to mingle with their boss, manager, customers, and coworkers at very young ages. Undoubtedly, these teenagers would become ready for their future job and can contribute to their company as an adaptable team member.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that experience is the best teacher for everyone ranging from a young child to an adult person. Neither parents' advice nor academic lessons can be useful for people to handle real-life issues. In other words, teenagers must be encouraged to experience different things in order to broaden their horizons during the time. Thus, parents can ask their teenagers to take a part-time job to face the challenges presented by financial issues like how to manage their savings or how to make a living. Consequently, they would learn how to address this issues independently which is vital for their future career since many employers put a premium on a person's problem-solving ability.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas which were presented above I believe that encouraging teenagers to take a part-time job is a way by which parents can prepare them for adult life. Finally, their children will expand their horizons and become experienced enough for their future job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...importance of interpersonal skills in a persons success. It is an undeniable fact that ...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a formal way" with adverb for "formal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...Besides, communication with people both in a formal way and in the workplace would be a differe...
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Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...young child to an adult person. Neither parents advice nor academic lessons can be usef...
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Line 5, column 702, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...r since many employers put a premium on a persons problem-solving ability. To wrap it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, thus, apart from, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.103117506 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86924618207 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525179856115 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7069299658 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.222222222 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460374544917 0.236089414692 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145621959308 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129327968484 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338386135522 0.150856017488 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980665555382 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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