TPO18(independent)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.

There is no shortage of debate whether student's behavior in childhoods makes their characteristic in future and this behavior influence by many people around them. In this regard, some people believe that their friends have more influence on them. However, there are other opinions that they have more notice to their teacher. As for this writer's opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In what follows, I delve into a couple of reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.

First and foremost, students have most of their daytime in schools and their classes. In these classes, teachers learn them the most necessary discipline for the way of living and for making their characteristic. As a teacher is studied how to teach the students in a rational way, they can have the deepest influence on them by their technics. By way of illustration, when I was a student, I was very aggressive. My parents could not find why I behaved In that way. First, they thought it might be an influence of my friends who are bigger than me and tried to hold me far away from them but it did not have any result. Finally, they spoke with my teacher. After some season of talking by my teacher, I convinced that I should not behave badly. Now, when I think about it, I remember how she spoke calmly and use some psychological methods to calm me down. As a result, she had a great influence on changing my behavior. This example clarifies how the teacher can use some professional methods to build a good characteristic in their students.

Furthermore, students almost believe what the wiser people say them. Vividly, they do not have enough experiences and rely on older and knowledgeable people. The hero of the students is their teacher because they know about everything they ask. So, the teacher can have an enormous influence on them by saying some wonderful thing or helping them to experience them. For Instance, my nephew's teacher always brings something new for his students. As the students are so enthusiastic about new technologies, they are so excited by the action of their teacher. As my nephew's view, his teacher is the most knowledgeable people in the world. He always talks about his teacher and tries to act like him. So, It is clear that how much his teacher influence on him. This example clarifies my point of view.

By perusing the above paragraphs one can infer that, although friends can have an influence on the students, teachers have a greater effect for building their characteristic. For sake of brevity, a couple of reason are worth mentioning: first, the teacher knows the method of behavior which can control students; second, students are influenced by their teachers' knowledge and experience. So, this result shows the important responsibility of the teachers.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 340, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...re notice to their teacher. As for this writers opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a rational way" with adverb for "rational"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...er is studied how to teach the students in a rational way, they can have the deepest influence on...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, as for, for instance, i think, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89194915254 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77801260419 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485169491525 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2089885488 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6206896552 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.275862069 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68965517241 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248320212233 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759730954305 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630485488388 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17361147239 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166261974434 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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