TPO23 – Independent: A/D? In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.

Today's world has been associated with the tremendous and fast-paste developments which bring up a critical and controversial question mark whether the accuracy should get sacrificed to the speed. By the time, there are the plethora of objections to acknowledge working fast and take risky mistakes as a genuine and concrete solution for harmonizing in this chaotic world. Admittedly, I believe we should assure that everything is correct in advance and each step ought to get calculated. Through ensuing paragraphs, the rationale behind this opinion will be elaborate.

First and for the most, the inattentive decisions in our work would cost profound fiascos which might exterminate our whole life and annihilate all we have done later. As the matter of fact, the heedless gambling with the life has vigorous detrimental outcomes in this fast-paste life. For the illustration, imagine that you are the sale representative of a company and need to buy the essentials of other departments. Practically, there are many online frauds and schemes for the negligent individuals who don't perceive the trickery behind the deceptive advertisements which manipulate them to purchase their products. Your precipitance will enable them to coax simply, and it is not far-fetched you will be trapped into those defrauder's maneuver to empty the company's pocket. We require a mindful observation through whatever we are about to participate in, either a simple purchase or start a business and so forth.

Moreover, no one can cast a shadow toward the fact that the nowadays rivals are very acknowledged and adroit in various fields and by our irrational movements we will be altered by them immediately. Frankly, your efforts will be invaded literally hip and tight!. For instance, I decided to work as a dental office manager just one month after moving to united states. It was a prompt and risky decision with no evaluation about the real vicissitudes and its rudimentary necessities about health care system in this country. However, I got the job in a way too sophisticated orthodontic dental office after a couple of attempts and I was doing it but gradually the resentments had been arisen by the clients and they compel me to dedicate my resignation letter before getting fired! And the week later, I found that they hired an experienced Indian manager. The fact is this new era doesn't have that much the reliance on the good fortune!

In brief, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the absent-minded and abrupt decision-making approach in our work is a pernicious and incongruous adjustment in the rapid-past developmental society and you will confront massive amount of failures in the long term since there are interminable line of the informed competitors who can get your place in various positions and the fraudulent who have ambushed to plunder all your efforts. I recommend to take our time properly and assure of every single step before the action.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...vive from their mistakes. Admittedly, I dont acknowledge taking risk making mistakes...
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Suggestion: don't
...hemes for the negligent individuals who dont perceive the trickery behind the decept...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ndian manager. The fact is this new era doesnt have the reliance on the fortune! In...
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Suggestion: all the
...e reliance on the fortune! In brief, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, frankly, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in brief

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17832957111 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94810373368 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613995485327 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.591736643 48.9658058833 242% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.461538462 100.406767564 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0769230769 20.6045352989 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.052815041678 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0191995193578 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421948328609 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0316554620178 0.150856017488 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285287078591 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 11.7677419355 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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