Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The connection among the young generation and their parents have altered outstandingly through the last decades since the hectic modern era requires both mothers and fathers to keep up a job or sometimes two to handle living expenses. The busy parenting raises a copious question about the way that they need to consume their remained time with the children. A very controversial issue is whether the best use of that time is to have fun with them or doing something related to school together? My perspective agrees with having fun with our beloved ones while we are off our jobs' duties. The following paragraphs will elaborate on the noteworthy reasons for this notion.
First, the sense of intimacy will heighten among them. For instance, my niece, Arsha has about eight years old. Her mom is so strict about his school assignment she believes in putting her son's schools duties priorly of his motherhood responsibilities. On the other hand, his father is very flexible and wants to spend his spare times playing soccer with him. For me as a third person who has observed their relationships since Arsha was born, it is clear that Arsha feels a greater intimacy with his father as he tries to explain his school's incidences or what kind of funny stories happened to him in that day when his father gets back home.
Second, fun activities will help babies to grow their emotional and social intelligence. As many scholars proved that playing has a crucial role in children's creativity since it makes their brains' nervous system synapsing more rapidly. And the higher synaptic action of our mind will help its cells to grow better.
Third, playing with children benefit the parents as well. Everyone knows that one of the most exhilarating moments for adults is when they play with kids. It boosts their mood and make them robust and enhances their alacrity. They feel like they get back to their childhood and it has an undeniable effect on their attitude, emotion, and lessen their anxiety and tensions.
To wrap the arguments up, all busy parent who is delicate about children's bests will soon convince that the beneficial facets of playing fun activities with their children in their spare time weights prominently more than working on their school stuff as it has a lot to do with increasing our offsprings' social intelligence, their state of intimacy with us. Hence, it intensifies the parents' happiness and satisfaction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 386, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...macy with us. Hence, it intensifies the parents happiness and satisfaction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, third, well, while, for instance, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96821515892 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58212009198 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586797066015 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.9652625413 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.947368421 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313769145175 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860450515287 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983143156455 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164487631732 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100305451248 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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