Helping the community is a significant factor for people's success. When the country is developed, everyone will live a wonderful and comfortable life. Some people believe that the youth do not spend more time in supporting the community today. Others disagree. Personally, I believe that young people spend less time nowadays in supporting the society for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, most of the youth spend their free time playing sports and doing activities after school. They do not have enough time to participate in volunteering work because the students are busy. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. When I was at high school, I had to attend sports class during the school time and also after school as my school's team was participating in an international competition. Therefore, I spend most of my time training to achieve my goal. As a result, I didn't have time to help the community as I went outdoor for twelve hours and then came to sleep. If I had an extra time in my day, I would help my society. However, most school requires a lot of work to do. This experience taught me that many people nowadays cannot help the society.
Secondly, most of people spend their time on the internet nowadays. During the last decades, the technology affects our live in positive and negative ways.Everyone spend at least one hour searching on the internet either for shopping, education or cooking. My friend's example is a good evidence for this. When I was my friend at any place. I found her sitting on the internet every 5 minutes to check her facebook, instagram and twitter. She was also shopping. When I asked her to be volunteer in any charitable organization, she told me that she did not have enough time to go through this but she will try. Therefore, if I were her, I would spend less time on the internet and help the community. As you can see, spending too much time on the internet reduces the involvement of the society's work.
In conclusion. I believe that young people do not participate well in the community's work like in the past. This is because they spend most of their time playing sports and doing activities after school, and because most of the youth spend more time on the internet. We should all know the effectiveness of helping the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'achieving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: achieving
...efore, I spend most of my time training to achieve my goal. As a result, I didnt have time...
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Suggestion: didn't
...ning to achieve my goal. As a result, I didnt have time to help the community as I we...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...society. However, most school requires a lot of work to do. This experience taugh...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...s cannot help the society. Secondly, most of people spend their time on the internet nowada...
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Suggestion: Everyone
... our live in positive and negative ways.Everyone spend at least one hour searching on th...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ds example is a good evidence for this. When I was my friend at any place. I found h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, at least, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75365853659 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71214796415 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480487804878 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8657311609 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.96 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231286918342 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683547559921 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617877860284 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164113700706 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531709861506 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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